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Johnny - May 14, 2006 06:05 PM (GMT)
Part One

Max and paddy getting jobs back- Written By Kay1
Brothel getting closed down- Written By Kay1
Comitee Meeting for the 'Hunks For Sale' Auction- Written By Ian
Max meeting Judith- Written By Han
Jerry's meeting with Brian about 'the scam'- Written By garlic_bread!04
Max romantically dates Judith- Written By garlic_bread!04

Part Two

Max and Paddy discussing his date- Written By garlic_bread!04
Rayvon, Young Kenny, Kenny snr, Les and Alan getting ready- Written By garlic_bread!04
The women gossiping about hunky men- Written By Kay1
Max and Paddy's 'Erotic' encounter at Judiths house- Written By dawneh
The auction with Jerry comparing -Les, Alan and Rayvon all up- Written By Han
Max and Paddy escaping Judiths house- Written By dawneh
Kenny and Kenny snr all up for bids-Written By Han
Brian spots Beverly in audience- Written By Ian
Max and Paddy Last Minute Bids- Written By Han
Beverly gets Brian arrested and he ends up in jail- Written By Kay1

COMPLETED

Han - May 14, 2006 06:13 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 14 2006, 06:05 PM)
Part One

Max and paddy getting jobs back- Written by Kay1
Brothel getting closed down
Max meeting Judith- Written by Han
Comitte Meeting for the 'Hunks For Sale' Auction- Written By Ian
Max's romantic Dates with Judith
Jerry's Meeting with Brian about 'the scam'

Part Two

Rayvon, Young Kenny, Kenny snr, Les and Alan getting ready
Max and paddy's 'Erotic' encounter at Judiths house
The auction with jerry comparing -Les, Alan and Rayvon all up
Max and paddy escaping judiths house
Kenny and Kenny snr all up for bids
Brian Spots Beverly in audience
Beverly gets brian arested and he ends up in jail

Just to let you know if anybody wants to add more scenes they can do, this is just a basic outline

Just a thought m'love -- if we're using the first ending I wrote (seeing as that one seems to be most popular so far!!) shouldn't the committee meeting fall before the Max/Judith meeting scene??? Or is this simply a breakdown of the scenes in no particular order???

I know I'm being picky!!! ;) :lol:

Johnny - May 14, 2006 06:14 PM (GMT)
No particular order! I'll swap them around so it dosn't confuse people

And also if you see a scene you want to write just say and i'll add your name! If you want to add a scene Give myself or Ian a PM

garlic_bread!04 - May 14, 2006 07:48 PM (GMT)
can i do one of the dates between max and judith???

can't promise it will be fab, but will have a go ;)

Johnny - May 15, 2006 10:05 AM (GMT)
Sorted for you Donna!

Also Han i've added your extra scene you wanted (thumbs up)

I'm also gonna write the next part of the script, which i'm gonna make a start on tonight.

dawneh - May 15, 2006 12:55 PM (GMT)
You can put me down for the "Max and paddy's 'Erotic' encounter at Judiths house" if you like !!!

Johnny - May 15, 2006 01:01 PM (GMT)
Sorted for you dawn! You lucky thing! :lol:

Also we need one more person to write for Part One then were sorted! :)

Han - May 15, 2006 08:06 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 15 2006, 10:05 AM)
Also Han i've added your extra scene you wanted (thumbs up)

Gooood. (Excit) I'm going to make a start on that bit, I've got an idea that I need to go with!! I know they haven't been done yet, but can I ask you to PM me the 2 Judith scenes (the escape and the encounter) when they're done. I'm going to need them!!! ;) Cheers!! (thumbs up)

Johnny - May 16, 2006 07:04 AM (GMT)
QUOTE (Han @ May 15 2006, 09:06 PM)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 15 2006, 10:05 AM)
Also Han i've added your extra scene you wanted  (thumbs up)

Gooood. (Excit) I'm going to make a start on that bit, I've got an idea that I need to go with!! I know they haven't been done yet, but can I ask you to PM me the 2 Judith scenes (the escape and the encounter) when they're done. I'm going to need them!!! ;) Cheers!! (thumbs up)

Well dawn's gonna be writing the encounter so if you want to get her to PM you when she's written it (thumbs up)

We just need somebody to write the escape!

Ian - May 16, 2006 02:32 PM (GMT)
I will post mine soon, needs a few things changing just really busy at the moment.

Johnny - May 16, 2006 02:45 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Ian @ May 16 2006, 03:32 PM)
I will post mine soon, needs a few things changing just really busy at the moment.

Ian your scene is after the one i'm typing up tonight, so if you want when i've posted mine on the 'Episode' thread, you can post yours.

Ian - May 16, 2006 02:56 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 16 2006, 03:45 PM)
QUOTE (Ian @ May 16 2006, 03:32 PM)
I will post mine soon, needs a few things changing just really busy at the moment.

Ian your scene is after the one i'm typing up tonight, so if you want when i've posted mine on the 'Episode' thread, you can post yours.

ok will do, might be tommorow when its posted though, as i'm editing paddys video tonight and then i've gotta edit 4 hours of audio for another site. But i promise i'll do it :lol:

Han - May 16, 2006 05:37 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 16 2006, 07:04 AM)
Well dawn's gonna be writing the encounter so if you want to get her to PM you when she's written it (thumbs up)

We just need somebody to write the escape!

Can you do that for me Dawn??? :) And the same goes for whoever tackles the escape bit???

Johnny - May 16, 2006 05:53 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Ian @ May 16 2006, 03:56 PM)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 16 2006, 03:45 PM)
QUOTE (Ian @ May 16 2006, 03:32 PM)
I will post mine soon, needs a few things changing just really busy at the moment.

Ian your scene is after the one i'm typing up tonight, so if you want when i've posted mine on the 'Episode' thread, you can post yours.

ok will do, might be tommorow when its posted though, as i'm editing paddys video tonight and then i've gotta edit 4 hours of audio for another site. But i promise i'll do it :lol:

No probs Ian! (thumbs up) I'm gonna post mine tomorrow now anyways because i left all me notes at work! :lol: :rolleyes:

Han - May 16, 2006 06:20 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 16 2006, 05:53 PM)
No probs Ian! (thumbs up) I'm gonna post mine tomorrow now anyways because i left all me notes at work! :lol: :rolleyes:

Tut tut tut ..... that's just disgusting that!!! ;)

Johnny - May 18, 2006 12:02 PM (GMT)
Right guys, we still have some empty spaces on the main page that need to be filled!

Mazza, Marlene, and janine your yet to pick a scene! Comon guys we need you! :lol:

Also if any of the other member want to join in.. paddysgal, icklebelter, haze etc??? your more than welcome!


Han - May 18, 2006 05:45 PM (GMT)
Will you look at that. Just gone over there to whack my bit up and I can't!!!

Can I borrow the key??? ;) :lol:

Or can someone unlock the door for me -- I'd ask one of you two to post it for me but I've done a couple of cosmetic changes to it (I know -- even after saying I wouldn't -- nothing major!!! :lol:) so neither of you have or have seen the current version!!!

Johnny - May 18, 2006 08:29 PM (GMT)
Opened for you Han! ;)

Han - May 18, 2006 08:48 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 18 2006, 08:29 PM)
Opened for you Han! ;)

Thank you m'love!!

Han - May 18, 2006 08:51 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 18 2006, 08:29 PM)
Opened for you Han! ;)

You can lock up again now!!! That was quick eh??

I know I didn't need to do another post but, y'know!!!

garlic_bread!04 - May 18, 2006 09:37 PM (GMT)
can i post my date scene now please??? :D

Han - May 18, 2006 09:43 PM (GMT)
Oooh. Can I have a go at the Les/Alan/Rayvon up for auction scene -- I have a cunning plan -- OK an interesting idea anyway!!!

Sorry. We're jumping on all these before the others have had a shot!!! :lol:

garlic_bread!04 - May 18, 2006 09:47 PM (GMT)
i'd really like to do the scene where brian and jerry are discussing the scam if nobody else minds??? :D

Han - May 18, 2006 09:49 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (garlic_bread!04 @ May 18 2006, 09:47 PM)
i'd really like to do the scene where brian and jerry are discussing the scam if nobody else minds???  :D

It's addictive this innit Don!!! :lol: :lol: ;)

I tell you the others had better get in here quick before all the good bits are gone!!! :lol:

garlic_bread!04 - May 18, 2006 09:51 PM (GMT)
yep can't wait to post my scene that i've written already :lol:

Han - May 18, 2006 09:53 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (garlic_bread!04 @ May 18 2006, 09:51 PM)
yep can't wait to post my scene that i've written already :lol:

Pssst. Don't know if I should say this but seen it!!! (thumbs up) (thumbs up) (thumbs up) Excellent bit!!!!

garlic_bread!04 - May 18, 2006 09:54 PM (GMT)
aaaahhh cheers me dears was worried it was crap!!! :rolleyes:

Han - May 18, 2006 09:57 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (garlic_bread!04 @ May 18 2006, 09:54 PM)
aaaahhh cheers me dears was worried it was crap!!! :rolleyes:

Not at all -- was p***ing myself!!! Fab!!!

garlic_bread!04 - May 18, 2006 11:01 PM (GMT)
ok have written the scene where brian and jerry are discussing the scam!! i know, i'm a bit eager but once i get started it flows really well ;)
all i need to do now is find someone to open the thread so i can post both my scenes

Johnny - May 19, 2006 09:32 AM (GMT)
Right guys i've opened the episode thread for you guys to post your scenes (thumbs up) I've also added your name's to the bits you want to write! :D

Which also means part one is complete!! (Excit) (Excit) I can't believe the enthusiasm of you guys! We only opened the thread last week! Well done to everybody thats contirbuted so far!

Looking forward to see whats in store for part two!! :D

garlic_bread!04 - May 20, 2006 08:28 AM (GMT)
can i do the guys getting ready for the auction scene as well please??? (someone tell me if i'm hogging it, but i'm really enjoying writing this!!!) :D

Han - May 20, 2006 09:44 AM (GMT)
QUOTE (garlic_bread!04 @ May 20 2006, 08:28 AM)
(someone tell me if i'm hogging it, but i'm really enjoying writing this!!!)  :D

I wouldn't worry about it Don!!! If anyone fancied anything else I reckon they would've said by now.

I need to stop calling you 'Don' don't I!!!! I'm annoying like that!!! :lol:

Johnny - May 20, 2006 07:51 PM (GMT)
Nah don't worry about it guys! I know Ians interested in doing one more scene, we've still got dawns contribution to come!

I'm still waiting for marlene and mazza to appear! :lol:

Han - May 20, 2006 08:07 PM (GMT)
Good to know!!!

Have you had a look at the bit I sent you the other day? What d'you reckon -- undecided on it myself??? :unsure:

Johnny - May 20, 2006 08:09 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Han @ May 20 2006, 09:07 PM)
Good to know!!!

Have you had a look at the bit I sent you the other day? What d'you reckon -- undecided on it myself??? :unsure:

Not looked at it yet, I'll get back to you later on it, i'm sure its got your han touch to it! :D

Han - May 20, 2006 08:14 PM (GMT)
QUOTE (Kay1 @ May 20 2006, 08:09 PM)
Not looked at it yet, I'll get back to you later on it, i'm sure its got your han touch to it! :D

Don't worry -- I'm not trying to rush you. Just wasn't sure myself.

The Han touch?? Cripes didn't realise I had a 'touch'!!! :lol: ;)

Well, I've done a little bit more work on it but it's little things like shots and setups and the like, but it's pretty much the same!

Johnny - May 21, 2006 11:09 AM (GMT)
QUOTE (garlic_bread!04 @ May 20 2006, 09:28 AM)
can i do the guys getting ready for the auction scene as well please??? (someone tell me if i'm hogging it, but i'm really enjoying writing this!!!) :D

Sorted for you donna! :D Glad you love this project so much!! :)

Wow the places are filling up thick and fast! I can't believe how well this little experiment has turned out!

Maybe we could write a whole series :lol:

Ian - May 21, 2006 01:10 PM (GMT)
I'll do "Brian spots Beverly in audience" but i won't be able to do it till thrusday as i've got exams this week

Han - May 21, 2006 01:24 PM (GMT)
And I was thinking -- if no-one else fancies it I'll take the 2 Kenny's for bids. :)

Johnny - May 21, 2006 03:59 PM (GMT)
Cheers guys! Right that leaves us to one final scene! And its max and paddy escaping judiths house! I suggest the person that takes this scene get in contact with dawn to see what her scenes gonna be like, Unless dawn would be willing to write this aswell :)




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